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[whitepad]***700;400;700,400;;** m352,45 l353,45,353,47,354,48,354,50,355,52,356,53,356,55 e|********* m327,75 l330,75,332,77,333,79,335,82,336,83,336,119,334,126,333,132,332,136,331,141,330,145,329,148,328,152,327,157,326,159,326,160,325,162,325,163,329,163,333,161 340,159,346,153,353,148,365,136,369,131,372,129,372,117,370,114,370,111 e|********* m367,95 l371,95,374,93,381,93,385,91,393,91,397,89,403,89 e|********* m374,112 l385,112,385,129,387,130,389,132,393,132,393,109,391,105,391,96,389,91,388,87,385,76,384,73,383,73,383,75,386,84,412,128,420,137,422,139,426,142,426,121 415,84,414,80,411,75 e|********* m410,70 l410,71,411,72 e|********* m341,197 l341,199 e|********* m314,217 l315,218,318,219,320,221,322,222,325,224,327,226,329,230,330,231,330,245,328,248,327,251,325,253,324,256,320,260,318,263,316,265,313,267,311,268,311,270,321,270 323,269,325,267,325,265,327,263,331,261,333,258,336,255,337,249,338,244 e|********* m339,224 l346,224,351,225,381,225,384,223,383,225,358,245,343,255,342,256,344,256,345,257,346,257,346,261,345,261,343,263,340,268,341,270,346,271,349,273,354,273,355,272 355,268,356,268,356,227,354,218,354,212,356,212,379,243,382,249,391,261,393,266,407,284,410,287,416,287,416,284,417,279,417,277,418,274,418,269,412,245,408,240 405,237,403,232 e|********* m392,203 l396,203,397,204,406,204,408,205,411,205 e|********* m135,68 l137,68 e|********* m152,68 l165,73,177,73,180,71,185,70,192,69,197,69,202,67,214,67,214,68,211,71,205,75,190,80,178,85,169,87,159,90,150,93,144,96,140,97,142,98,145,99 163,103,212,118,213,119,213,133,211,135,208,137,204,139,200,142,194,143,189,144,185,145,182,146,171,146,171,144,173,143,174,140,181,133,199,111,202,106,203,101 203,95,199,93,193,93,192,94,192,95,189,101,187,106,186,115,183,124,182,131,181,145,179,156,179,203,180,217,191,264,192,269,195,273,195,277,194,275,191,272 188,267,184,263,173,242,167,235,163,227,163,224,179,208,190,206,194,206,193,210,184,218,174,230,151,253,148,257,147,259,190,260,224,258,233,255,235,254,234,254 230,255,222,255,220,254,216,251,211,247,208,246,206,245 e|********* m134,67 l143,67 e[/whitepad]

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[whitepad]***700;400;700,400;;** m517,110 l517,112,516,112,515,113,513,114,511,116,511,117,509,117,509,118,508,119,507,121,507,123,506,124,506,125,505,126,505,127,504,127,504,129,503,129,502,131,502,133 501,133,500,135,500,137,499,137,499,139,498,139,497,141,495,143,495,144,494,144,494,145,490,145,490,146,488,146,483,151,482,151,481,152,481,153,480,153,478,155 477,157,477,158,475,158,472,161,471,161,470,163,469,163,468,164,468,165,467,167,466,168,465,168,465,169,464,170,463,170,462,171,462,173,460,173,459,174,458,174 458,175,457,176,455,177,454,178,454,179,447,179,444,181,441,181,441,182,439,183,429,183,429,184,428,184,427,185,425,185,425,186,424,186,424,187,423,187,423,188 422,188,422,189,419,189,418,190,418,191,417,191,417,192,416,192,416,193,415,193,415,194,414,194,412,195,411,196,411,197,410,197,406,201,405,201,405,202,390,202 390,205,389,205,389,214,390,215,390,217,395,217,397,218,404,218,405,220,409,220,410,222,412,222,412,223,414,223,414,224,416,225,416,226,418,228,418,229,431,229 433,227,437,225,438,224,440,224,440,223,441,223,442,222,444,222,444,221,445,221,445,220,446,220,446,219,453,212,453,211,454,210,454,209,455,209,455,208,456,207 456,206,458,206,458,205,459,205,459,204,460,202,462,202,462,201,464,201,464,200,466,200,466,199,467,199,467,198,469,198,469,197,471,197,471,196,480,196,480,195 481,195,482,194,483,194,484,193,486,193,486,192,513,192,514,193,521,193,521,219,522,219,522,220,521,221,522,221,522,226,521,227,520,227,520,228,519,229,519,230 518,230,518,232,517,232,517,233,514,233,514,235,513,235,513,242,512,242,511,243,509,243,509,247,446,247,446,250,448,251,448,253,449,253,449,255,448,255,448,254 445,254,445,252 e|********* m448,248 l448,271,486,271,487,270,488,270,488,269,490,267,491,267,491,266,493,265,494,265,496,264,497,263,508,263,508,283,507,283,507,285,500,285,498,286,497,286,495,287 487,287,485,288,483,288,481,290,477,290,476,291,474,292,413,292,413,303,415,305,415,311,416,313,417,314,417,315,418,316,418,319,419,319,419,320,421,321,424,321 426,323,445,323,447,322,450,322,450,321,451,321,451,320,452,320,453,319,455,319,455,317,456,317,456,316,458,316,459,315,460,315,462,313,527,313,529,312,530,311 531,311,531,310,536,310,536,309,538,309,539,308,579,308,579,307,580,307,580,306,594,306,594,308,596,308,596,312,608,312,608,313,610,313,610,314,615,314,615,315 625,315,625,312 e|********* m519,111 l528,111,528,110,545,110,545,111,546,111,546,114,547,115,547,116,548,117,548,120,550,120,550,121,558,121,559,122,560,122,560,123,561,124,564,124,564,125,565,126 565,127,566,128,567,131,567,132,568,132,568,135,569,136,570,139,573,142,573,145,574,146,575,148,575,151,577,153,579,154,580,155,580,156,582,156,586,157,594,157 595,158,597,158,599,159,601,159,601,160,603,160,603,161,604,162,605,162,606,164,606,166,609,166,610,167,612,168,623,168,623,169,624,169,625,170,625,171,633,171 634,172,636,172,636,173,640,173,642,174,666,174,666,175,665,175,663,177,661,178,656,180,656,181,655,181,655,182,654,182,654,184,653,184,653,189,652,189,652,198 651,198,650,199,650,200,649,201,649,203,648,203,648,205,646,205,646,206,643,206,643,208,642,208,642,210,641,210,641,211,640,211,640,212,639,212,639,214,638,215 637,215,637,217,636,218,636,220,635,220,635,223,620,223,620,221,619,221,619,220,618,218,617,218,617,217,616,217,616,216,615,216,614,215,614,212,613,212,613,211 612,211,612,209,609,208,607,207,605,207,605,206,604,206,603,205,602,205,598,203,597,203,597,202,595,201,594,200,593,200,593,199,592,199,592,196,591,195,590,193 590,192,589,191,589,187,588,186,588,183,587,183,587,180,569,180,568,181,568,182,567,182,567,184,566,184,566,186,565,186,565,187,564,188,549,188,549,191,548,191 548,192,547,192,546,193,546,201,545,201,545,206,544,206,544,208,543,208,543,211,542,211,542,213,541,213,541,216,539,216,539,217,538,216,537,216,537,224,531,224 531,226,530,225,528,225,528,224,527,223,528,219 e|********* m548,200 l547,200,547,208,546,208,545,210,545,211,544,212,544,214,543,214,543,215,542,215,542,217,541,220,540,220,540,230,539,230,539,240,538,240,538,245,577,245,577,244 579,244,579,243,580,243,580,242,579,242,579,249,580,249,580,251,581,251,581,255,583,255,583,257,584,257,584,272,581,272,581,273,580,273,580,272,579,271,577,271 575,269,573,268,572,267,571,267,571,266,569,266,565,265,539,265,539,266,537,266,537,268,535,268,535,269,534,269,534,277,538,277,538,286,539,286,540,287,574,287 574,286,575,286,577,285,595,285,595,286,605,286,607,284,606,283,606,282,612,282,612,280,614,280,616,281,616,282,614,282,614,284,616,284,616,285,617,286,618,286 619,287,620,287,619,288,619,291,624,295,624,296,625,298,627,300,627,306,628,306,628,307,629,308,629,313,630,313,630,315,629,316,624,316,624,314 e|********* m471,207 l468,207,468,208,466,208,466,209,465,209,464,211,464,213,463,214,463,215,461,215,461,220,462,220,462,222,464,222,465,224,467,225,467,229,468,230,470,231,482,231 483,230,483,229,484,228,484,223,485,223,485,222,486,222,486,221,487,221,491,219,494,219,494,218,500,216,500,215,501,215 e|********* m472,208 l484,208,484,210,496,210,496,213,497,213 e|********* m569,210 l568,210,570,209,570,208,573,208,573,207,575,206,575,204,576,203,577,203,577,201,578,201,578,200,580,200,580,199,583,199,583,201,584,201,584,206,586,210,586,211 587,211,587,220,588,221,588,224,586,224,586,225,561,225,561,224,559,223,557,220,556,219,556,213,558,212,558,211,560,210,560,209,570,209,570,205 e|********* m523,142 l523,144,521,144,519,146,519,147,518,148,518,149,517,149,517,151,516,151,516,157,515,157,515,158,512,161,511,161,509,162,506,162,506,163,504,164,503,165,503,167 500,167,499,168,499,169,496,169,496,171,494,171,494,172,493,172,493,174,558,174,558,171,565,171,565,167,564,167,564,165,563,163,563,162,562,162,562,159,561,158 561,157,560,157,560,156,559,154,559,152,558,152,557,150,557,149,556,149,556,148,554,148,553,147,553,146,550,146,550,145,545,145,545,143,544,142,544,141,542,141 541,140,541,138,539,138,539,137,537,136,534,136,534,137,530,137,529,138,527,138,527,140,526,140,526,141,525,142,525,144 e|********* m127,128 l127,131,163,131,163,130,168,129,169,129,169,128,221,128,221,126,222,126,222,125,223,124,224,124,224,123,226,123,226,122,227,122,230,123,236,123,237,124,240,125 249,125,258,126,263,126,263,127,264,128,268,128,275,130,285,130,285,129,293,129,293,130,297,130,297,131,304,131,304,148,303,148,303,149,302,150,301,150,301,152 300,152,300,153,297,153,295,152,295,151,293,151,292,150,292,149,289,149,289,148,287,147,266,147,263,148,261,149,259,149,255,150,254,151,250,151,248,152,244,155 211,155,211,154,210,154,207,151,206,151,206,150,205,150,203,148,203,147,199,147,198,146,196,146,196,145,178,145,178,146,172,146,172,147,165,147,165,148,163,148 163,150,162,150,158,154,152,154,152,152 e|********* m124,135 l122,135,122,129,121,129,121,124,115,124,114,125,113,125,113,177,112,177,112,198,111,198,111,196,110,196,110,197,108,198,106,198,104,199,102,199,102,208,104,208 104,240,102,240,101,241,101,242,100,243,98,243,98,244,96,244,96,245,94,246,93,247,93,249,92,249,92,250,91,251,91,252,90,253,86,253,85,254,85,255 38,255,38,254,37,254,37,253,35,253,35,257,36,257,36,258,37,262,37,267,39,269,39,275,40,277,45,278,51,278,59,280,61,280,64,281,73,281,75,282 81,284,85,284,85,285,87,286,88,292,90,294,90,296,93,296,95,295,95,293,97,293,97,291,98,291,98,288,99,287,100,287,100,286,102,286,102,285,106,284 109,283,110,282,111,282,111,281,112,280,112,277,113,276,113,269,114,268,115,268,115,266,117,266,117,264,118,264,118,258,119,257,120,257,121,256,121,254,122,254 122,247,123,247,123,233,125,233,125,226,126,225,126,223,127,223,127,222,130,219,130,218,132,218,132,205,133,204,134,202,134,198,135,197,135,195,136,195,136,183 137,182,137,168,138,167,138,162,139,162,139,161,141,159,143,159,145,158,151,156,153,155,153,154,154,154,156,153,157,152,156,152,156,149 e|********* m163,197 l163,209,164,211,164,212,165,214,167,216,168,216,168,219,170,221,170,222,172,222,173,225,173,249,174,251,174,253,175,253,175,257,176,257,176,263,174,263 e|********* m162,196 l163,196,163,195,165,195,167,193,218,193,218,192,219,192,221,190,224,190,225,189,226,189,226,188,228,188,228,187,250,187,254,189,261,191,264,191,268,192,273,194 291,194,291,196,293,196,294,197,298,197,298,206,297,206,297,209,296,209,296,211,294,212,294,214,293,214,293,218,292,220,291,220,290,222,290,223,289,224,286,224 286,225,285,225,285,260,281,260,279,262,273,262,273,264,269,265,265,265,264,263,263,262 e|********* m181,262 l181,263,223,263,223,265,224,265,225,266,241,266,242,265,255,265,254,264,268,264 e|********* m185,261 l185,263,172,263,172,259,174,259 e|********* m196,209 l189,209,189,210,188,210,188,217,187,217,187,227,190,227,190,229,191,229,191,242,204,242,206,243,209,243,209,244,232,244,233,246,234,246,234,252,242,252,242,251 243,251,243,249,247,247,249,247,250,246,252,245,255,245,255,244,259,244,259,243,263,243,263,240 e|********* m192,207 l214,207,215,208,215,209,226,209,234,212,237,213,237,214,243,214,245,215,256,215,256,214,258,214,258,213,259,213,259,212,260,211,261,211,261,210,266,210,268,211 271,211,271,227,270,227,270,228,268,229,267,230,267,235,265,235,265,234,264,234,264,233 e|********* m267,234 l267,235,266,235,266,238,265,238,265,242,264,242 e[/whitepad]

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