临苏轼寒食帖

张义方

多批评指导啊。

吴亚非

苏的线条的厚度古今应该是前十名的人物,您的线怯了些,另结构也似不准确...

经天

继续努力啊em1 em1

黑洞居士

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梦草堂

笔意是对的，只是临得还有些草率

金沙子

em1 em1 好像单薄了些,用笔还要内敛一些,写出书卷气,形像的同时还要求神似!!拙言,见笑了!!

娟娟juanjuan

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地书老君

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张义方

我会继续努力的哈哈

李嘉赋

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